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Education for young people is important in many countries. However, some people think that governments should spend more money on education in adult population who cannot read and write. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#education #people #countries #governments #money #adult #population
A section of society holds a belief that every single
youngsters
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 should have a proper
education
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 any level of studies. In my opinion, better quality pedagogy
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 more likely beneficial in generating more intellectual folks for the future. To commence with, nowadays, there are numerous
education
instituitions
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institutions
 from
kindagatens
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kindergartens
 to tertiary level. It is undeniable that academic learning is the
first
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succeed
 in
the
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life,
although
 several
society
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 argue that
education
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 for giving exposure
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them
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how life is work. Despite that,
statistically
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 almost more than half
billionaires
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 in the world
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succeed
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 has a decent academic background,
however
, many people still turn a blind eye to
this
 matter as it is nothing vital at all.
On the other hand
, there are copious inhabitants
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 that
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governments
government
goverments
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governments
 should invest their money for
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 folks chiefly
education
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in education
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. It is to give the same equality as well as
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 for everyone to
futher
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further
 their studies in higher level. The cost might be
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prohibitive,
nevertheless
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 it is worth
investment
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 as
this
 is for enhancing the economical developments in the future. Seeing in believing, there will at least a few of these people will lead the country in
few
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 years later. In conclusion,
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 think
education
 systems need to be maximized concomitant with our era, to aid
adoloscents
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adolescents
 in their learning process.
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