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Some experts say for road safety cyclists should pass a test before being allowed on public roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many columnists
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 raised the concern for
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 rider to learn and go through the exam for safety measures. In my opinion, to control the stoppage and accidents on the streets people must understand the basic transit rules.
Hence
, I agree with the
experts
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 point of view and I will explain
this
 in the following paragraph with an example. Nowadays, many folks have started cycling to stay physically fit and it's beneficial for mental health too;
however
, it comes with challenges that public and state law need to take care
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Firstly
, before riding a cycle in a public area one must learn the street sign and understand the basic pathway needs,
otherwise
, there are high chances that someone can meet with an accident and interrupt other bypassers.
For example
, a recent survey found that around 60 per cent of
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 lack
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transport
 regulation knowledge and often break the law which
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 the main reason causing cramps.
Secondly
, the government must tighten the regulation for
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cyclist before they get on the streets for the safety of others and
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control the transit crowd.
Moreover
,
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rider
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riders
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 should follow the highway signal, ride in the dedicated area, and
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not interrupt
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public
transport
 as well as the hospital vehicles. To exemplify, India reports a high rate of accidental deaths and jam-packed crossroads as many of the community are not aware of the land
transport
 law,
this
 is
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 concern that most of the countries around the globe are dealing with. To conclude,
transport
 rules learning and examination must be mandatory for the cyclist for safety and controlling the crowd, especially during peak hours. I tend to agree with the experts introducing rules to go through the test before riding
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 on the public street, so
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the individual
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individual
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 will not disrupt other
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 and maintain a safe environment.
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