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Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter: •explain what you are currently doing •describe your suitability for this area of work •say when you can attend an interview

#restaurant #job #•explain #•describe #suitability #area #work #•say #interview
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Dear Sir, I hope
this
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 letter finds you in best of the spirits and radiant health. I am writing
this
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 letter to let you know that I am interested in applying for the position of
a
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chef in your hotel. Currently, I am employed as an Assistant Chef in the hotel Clarks
inn
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Inn
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. I have been working in
food
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the food
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 industry
from
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for
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 the
last
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 five years. I did a few courses from
a renowned cookery schools
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renowned cookery schools
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 in the UK and since
then
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 I have been working.
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, I hold a Bachelor's degree in Food Science, which not only
enable
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enables
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 me to understand the nutrition part of
the
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apply
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food but
also
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enhance
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enhances
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 my cooking skills. I am keen to work with your hotel and
therefore
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, I am willing to appear for a formal interview next week if it is convenient
to
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for
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 you,as I will be able to showcase my credentials in person. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Jatinder.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that all sentences flow logically and that there are smooth transitions between paragraphs. Some sentences could be rephrased for clearer connections.
task achievement
Avoid minor grammatical errors such as 'from the last five years' which should be 'for the last five years'. Small errors can cause confusion and affect clarity.
task achievement
The letter provides a clear and complete response to the task, addressing all three bullet points effectively.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is professional and suitable for a job application, demonstrating good command of formal language.
coherence cohesion
The letter begins with a polite greeting and ends with a respectful closing, which contributes to the overall professionalism.
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