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Some experts say for road safety cyclists should pass a test before being allowed on public roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Detractors have raised
the
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concern
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concerns
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for
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about
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 the bicycle riders to learn and
go through
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taking
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 the exam for safety measures. In my opinion, to control the stoppage and accidents on the
streets
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streets,
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 people must understand the basic transit rules.
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, I agree with the expert's point of view
and
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, and
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 I will explain
this
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 in the following paragraph with an example. Nowadays, many folks have started cycling to stay physically fit
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 it's beneficial for mental health too;
however
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, it comes with challenges that public and state law need to take care of.
Firstly
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, before riding a cycle in a public
area
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area,
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 one must learn the street
sign
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signs
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 and understand the basic pathway needs
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otherwise
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, there are high chances that someone can meet with an accident and interrupt other
bypassers
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pedestrians
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.
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, a recent survey found that around 60 per cent of travellers lack transport regulation knowledge and often break the law
which
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, which
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 was the main reason causing cramps.
Secondly
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, the government must tighten the
regulation
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regulations
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 for cyclists before they get on the streets to control
stoppage
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stoppages
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 and for the safety of others.
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, a rider should follow the highway signal, ride in the dedicated area, and not interrupt public movement
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as
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, as
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 well as the hospital vehicles. To exemplify, India reports a high rate of accidental deaths and jam-packed crossroads
as
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, as
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 many of the community are not aware of the land transportation law
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this
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 is the primary concern that most of the countries around the globe are dealing with.
To conclude
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, transport rules learning and examination must be mandatory for
the
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cyclist
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cyclists
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 for safety and controlling the crowd, especially during peak hours. I tend to agree with the experts
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introducing
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 rules to go through the test before riding a bicycle on the public street, so the individual will not disrupt other travellers and maintain a safe environment.

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structure
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linking
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accuracy
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examples
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positive
Clear view is stated in the essay.
positive
The essay uses some good end lines like 'To conclude'.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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