one of the best way to solve worlds environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel prices. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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are
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influenced by culture and tradition but in
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day and age
fashion
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are
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greatly dominated by social media influencers and content creators around the world. Indeed for me, it has
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outcome since it is a sign of modernization as
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and hairstyle
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to bring out the best look for each individual. In
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era, young teens,young
adult
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and other ages are very particular
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their facade. They would
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lots of money to make a
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statement, on the way they dress and showcase their branded items. They would usually post
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social media and it would catch attention and later on gain
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. Once it goes viral everyone wants to imitate and experience
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it becomes a trend.
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in Seoul Korea, they are marketing
K pop
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bands and it has
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massive
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around the world. Once a particular K-pop band endorses a brand like Louis Vuitton, Fila, Samsung and
haircolors
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hair colors
.
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flock to buy the items online or in retail stores and it's always sold out. Regardless of the price,
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are obsesses
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to possess the item for their personal satisfaction. Once they wear it,they gained popularity as it became a trend.
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goes for Italy wherein luxury brands showcase their seasonal couture, they will invite famous people and
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to hype the advertisement and promote their shows.
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will anticipate and buy their items. To conclude,
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fashion
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icon you want to follow,
fashion
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come
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and goes. It's
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wear and tear...and the cycle is unending because people need clothes, hairstyles,
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hair colors
, perfumes and a lot more. It is a human physiologic requirement that we need to adapt to feel
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, happy and good inside out.
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