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In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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A recent trend in some nations has seen an increasing number of people
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live independently rather than stay with their families.
Although
 there are some benefits
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freedom
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 aspect, I firmly believe living alone would make detrimental effects
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 psychological perceptions.
To begin
 with, when young workers choose solo living, they may get to be more free and self-reliant than those who live with family members since they have the freedom to take on their own. They will bear the duty of each choice they make in their life.
For instance
, a young grown-up, who lives alone, must learn to cook, clean the house, and plan his budget, all of which are important life abilities.
Therefore
, they can do whatever they want without the fear of being disturbed/
However
, living alone is having a negative impact on
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future generations. There are serious problems arising from
this
 trend
such
 as depression.
For instance
, people are spending
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 of their time alone at home and lack social values.
Such
 kind of isolation is not healthy and can sometimes lead to depression and anxiety. Apart from
this
, there
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day to day
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 problems that occurs in one’s life when
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 live alone.
Such
 as, there is no one to help while doing daily chores, it has to be done alone. In conclusion, It has become more popular among
young
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 generation to live alone rather than with family. I think
this
 view is useful for bringing freedom way, but, in some cases,
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depression and
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anxiety are detrimental
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 them.
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