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the transformation at Sunnyhill University in 1995 and today

The two pictures illustrate the transformation at Sunnyhill University in 1995 and today. There were many changes to new buildings and recreation
areas
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 period. in the past, the Scott library was opposite the founder’s building, but now the Scott library moves to the right-hand neighboring position to the founder’s building; and it is expanded as twice as it was. To replace that position,
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new laboratories were constructed.
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, in 1995 the car park
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 was in the top-left of the
campus
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, but now it is moved to the near
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, and replaced by the main reception building. The halls of residence, in 1995, were
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 to the Scott library, but now it is separated into two buildings in the far-left
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 of the
campus
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. There was a large
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 for sports facilities including a football pitch, tennis courts, and gym in the past, but now they were moved to other
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 and separated into many
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 including in the far-right of the map for new table tennis tables and in the top-central of the map for squash courts and gym facilities. At present, the right-bottom of the
campus
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 contains a recreation
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, pound, trees, and seating
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 for students. It is clear that the
campus
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 of Sunnyhill University was undergone many changes in the period of 1995 and today.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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