Learning to play team sports is an important part of a child’s education. Do you agree or disagree?

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in Asia the parents always want
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children
going to be the best in class . After the orthodox time in
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and more
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, they need to learn more and more . So
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team sports is essential for child's education is make them a great emotion they can laugh with them
friends
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them
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body and is good for
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play
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team sports can make them
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up , they can
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friends
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sports team can make the memory
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friends
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can make a perfect future
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with
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so agree about
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social skills
  • communication
  • cooperation
  • teamwork
  • discipline
  • commitment
  • punctuality
  • physical development
  • endurance
  • healthy competition
  • coping with losses
  • sense of belonging
  • community
  • self-esteem
  • leadership
  • strategic decisions
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