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Deforestation caused by human activity is happening in many parts the word, with serious results for the environment. What do you think can be done to solved this problem

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plants are the magnification creation of essence.
moreover
 the photosynthesis process plays a vital role in dynamically balance in the environment.Nowadays various human processes directly affect
this
 environmental balance.
As a result
 ,it makes it a more serious problem for mother nature. With the rapid development in the
,
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word human activity causes serious damage to the environment.They demark their territory by changing the natural structure of the environment.
However
,
this
 problem has
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 to other animals. Deforestation,water pollution,air pollution,Increasement in toxic chemical usage,ozone depletion, and global greenhouse gas effects are the most crucial exertion.Among them, deforestation can influence a significant level. Forest supplies oxygen for all animals around the world.It
also
 helps to maintain the water cycle,rain pattern,climate and cooling.Plants are an angel on earth.By destroying
this
 valuable mother humour it becomes a worse place in
this
 university.In my concern,to overcome these problems people have their own discipline.
Firstly
 they must change their mind themselves self.They must love nature as they love them.love, and kindness can change everything in
this
 world. The
second
 thing is there must be a technical way to increase reforestation and protection system for the forest.
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