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Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way.

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There is no doubt that social
media
 applications influence societies. Many
people
 think that social
media
sites
 have a lot of advantages for the community.
However
, I think that social
media
sites
 have many disadvantages that affect young
people
such
 as a toxic environment, fake relationships, and negative influence. Social
media
 applications are one of the worst places where
people
 can express their ideas. The percentage of the boilers that exist in these applications is huge since they can do whatever they want without getting harmed by any authorized institution
this
 caused a big separation between the real
world
 and the social
media
world
. As a human society we cannot lives without making a connection with the
world
 around us but using social
media
sites
 as the main way to build our relationships and choosing our guidance lead to a distraction in the social communication between
people
.
For example
, nowadays you can see young
people
 seeking to be like some calibrates like Kim Kardashian or Justen which leads to unrealistic imagination about them that they are smart and living an easy life. Social
media
 traps and isolates young
people
 from the real
world
. To sum up, there is no doubt that social
media
sites
 are a double-edged weapon that affects the
people
 in the way that they control or been controlled via
this
 application but the negative influence on these apps is huge and makes life harder to understand since many things are going to be fake.
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