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The only way to imporve road safety is to give stricker punishment to driving offences. To what extent do you aree or disagree?

#imporve #road #safety #stricker #punishment #offences #aree
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Nowadays, the majority of
people
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 do not follow
traffic
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regulations
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. Some
people
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 believe that the only way to develop
road
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safety
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 is to give stricter punishment to
people
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 who are breaking
traffic
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 laws. I strongly agree with
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 statement and, I think that
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 imposing huge
fines
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 and cancelling
offenders
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' licence help to improve
road
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safety
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 problems and, I will explain my reason for it in the upcoming paragraphs. There are many methods to improve
road
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safety
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 issues.
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 and foremost, give stronger punishment to
offenders
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 who break
traffic
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regulations
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 like cancelling their licence.
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, if government cancel
offenders
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' licence,
as a result
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,
offenders
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 never do the same mistake again which helps to improve the
road
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safety
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problem
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 very rapidly.
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, sending
offenders
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 to prison for a few duration creates fear in them and they will never try to break
traffic
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regulations
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 again.
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, police authorities should take strict action against every person for their crime.
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, Sikkim one of the states in India released strict laws against
offenders
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 not riding bikes carrying Tripple passengers
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people
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 need to pay a huge fine and
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 spent 5 years in prison.
Furthermore
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, imposing
fines
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 on rule breakers helps to reduce
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problem
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 very efficiently and improve
road
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safety
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problem
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.
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, the Indian government released rupees 10000
fines
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 for individuals if they break driving laws and
regulations
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.
As a result
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, according to the past year's ,record it can be seen that the offence rate in driving is decreasing continuously.
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, giving stricker punishment helps to develop
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safety
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 problems very efficient way. In conclusion, the
road
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safety
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 issue is a huge
problem
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 at the current time due to breaking
traffic
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 rules.
However
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, in my opinion, giving stricker punishments like imposing huge
fines
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 and cancelling
offenders
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' licences help to improve
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 issue.
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