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As a part of education, students should spend a period of time living in another country to learn its language and culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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As it is becoming more commonly believed that
language
 and culture
education
 is necessary for today’s young, some go as far as to say
students
 should actually study these in another country, to which I strongly concur.
Firstly
, when it comes to enriching
education
, nothing is as powerful as hands-on experience. Equipping
students
 with prowess in foreign
language
 communication and cultural engagement requires practice that books alone cannot give. Overseas
education
 programs significantly enhance the student learning outcomes in these areas through immersive and participatory experiences wherein nuances
such
 as slang, non-verbal’s, cultural norms, and etiquette are experienced
first
-hand.
Such
 skills in intercultural communication are valuable in a globalizing world. Not only that, but advanced to native level foreign
language
 acquisition is streamlined as
students
 are forced to navigate a foreign country using the local
language
. Aside from the academic edge for
students
, there are indeed benefits to the broader communities they represent. Take,
for instance
, the increased cultural exchange in a globalizing economy. Over the years, certain cultures have dominated the world with power and prestige, and they tend to set the bar for success, but cultural exchange makes space for less prominent cultures to show who they are and speak for themselves. As
students’
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 study and eventually work alongside locals in far-off places, they learn and teach their peers about their respective cultures and build on shared socio-cultural awareness.
This
 is one of the key components to dismantling systems of racism, ethnocentrism
,
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 and prejudice that millions face around the globe. As illustrated in
this
 essay, there are clearly pertinent reasons to support
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education
 in a foreign country for today’s up-and-coming
students
.
Besides
 honing their personal
language
 and communication skills, it will have lasting positive impacts in the future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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