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There are more families having only one child in the modern days. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is a trend that more families tend to have only
one
child
 in the modern days. I think its advantages outweigh its disadvantages. and my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
First
, it's easier for
parents
. As we know, cultivating a kid from boyhood to manhood requires innumerable efforts.
For example
, when children are still infants,
parents
 need to check whether they are hungry constantly. When they are in school,
parents
 need to check their homework regularly. At
this
 point, the more children the
parents
 have, the more pressure they have to take.
Besides
, having
one
child
 is more economical. Take China as an example. It's prevailing that Chinese
parents
 want their kids to study abroad;
however
, it's extremely pricy for most families.
Therefore
, were there two or more children in a family, it's bound to cause some arguments and alienate their relationships.
Second
, it's advantageous to the growth of the kids. It's expected that if the age difference between siblings is too large, the older ones might bully the younger ones. It has been reported that family violence can adversely affect a person's characteristics; bullying from older sisters or brothers is considered
one
 of the main causes. Take me as an example. I have a sister who is older than me. During our childhood, we often had fights; our
parents
 were partial to me just because I was younger. In
this
 case, it's unfair to the older kids.
On the other hand
, having only
one
child
 has some demerits as well.
For instance
, the kid can be selfish. It's commonplace that if a family only has
one
child
,
this
child
 will have all the love and resources.
On the contrary
,
such
 a situation can render
this
child
 to be selfish and don't know to cherish it. In conclusion, I believe the merits of having only
one
child
 outstrip its demerits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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