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Advertising
goods
had an impactful effect
to
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customers.
However
, there are
people
who believe it has a negative outcome. While
people
think it is positive to have a way of introducing a variety of products others disagree.
This
essay will show how negative effects on consumers aren't effective. There are,
however
, advertising is beneficial for our society to see new products.
This
is simply because, without having a way to reach the
goods
,
thus
they won't be able to purchase
it
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.
For instance
, if a new phone device
been
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announced,
and
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It will have advantages that will improve
the
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communication,
thus
people
will purchase it. Marketing makes it easier for
people
to discover new stuff. Ultimately, commercials are helpful for the community. There are those who believe spreading awareness about their stuff is boring.
Although
it is because some ads were repetitive on social media platforms,
thus
it will certainly make
people
unhappy.
For example
, If a new laptop got announced more than 3 times in the same month,
then
people
will lose interest in the laptop.
This
is a negative outcome, but
people
will still
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to have another look later on.
People
can be bored and will still possibly buy it.
This
means,
campaigns
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that campaigns
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sometimes could be boring.
However
, it doesn't deny the
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possibility
possiblity
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possibility
of purchasing. In conclusion, I believe commercials are helpful for the community to purchase a variety of beneficial
goods
. Communicating the
goods
through marketing will improve the chance of
discovering
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. Ads will continue to have positive outcomes for sharing stuff through
socials
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.
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