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In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong while other consider it as valuable work experience. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In many nations,
children
 are involved in various types of employment. Some people say that it is utterly wrong while
other
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 think that it prepares them for the workforce.
Although
it
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effects
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affects
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on
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their studies, I believe that they learn numerous skills that are useful for their career. On the one hand, some say that working before the age of eighteen is wrong because it can affect how
children
 perform in
regards
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 to their studies.
This
 is to say that they tend to waste a massive amount of time at work that could be spent on their education,
as a result
, it leads to lowering their grades in class.
For example
, a survey in Canada found that
children
 who were working
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part time
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 were less likely to get higher marks than
children
 who did not.
However
, I do not agree with
this
 school of thought because of the reason elucidated below.
On the other hand
, some people think that some kind of paid work
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 them to acquire a great
deals
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 of skills.
This
 is because
,
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children
 learn how to
scocialise
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socialise
socialize
 with
public
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the public
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 and they
also
 learn time management skills that
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most employers looking for.
For instance
, teenagers working at restaurants can do better
face to face
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conversation
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 than
who
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those who
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 do not work.

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