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space exploration is much too expensive and the money should be spent on more importang things, what is your opinion?

#space #exploration #money #importang
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It is undeniable that planetary exploration is costing inflated money,
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, it is indispensable for humankind. while some people think that authorities should stop spending money on
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 research, I moderately agree with
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 opinion because it has a tremendous impact on nations' progress, and the arguments will be elucidated in
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 essay. To commence, the significant breakthrough in astronomy studies assists in advancing a country`s standing on the global stage. More specifically, when part of the state budget is allocated for astronomy studies, any new discoveries will be attributed to the country itself which leads to placing
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 state into the ranks of the world countries.
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, the United States took the initiative to send the
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 astronaut to the Moon, and Neil Armstrong became the
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 human to set foot on its surface.
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, America has become a pioneer in space exploration activities at the world level.
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, the expenditure on solar system discovery would have grave repercussions for
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 countries’ budgets. To illustrate, if an immense amount of money has been disbursed on galaxy explorations, the developing governments would not be able to tackle the substantial underlying causes of poverty,
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 as job creation, infrastructure, healthcare, and education. What can be said is that the fundamental goal for developing nations is economic progress which means the state budget should be spent on public services rather than on scouting about the physical universe beyond the earth's atmosphere. In conclusion, after
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 essay has shown the above point, I partly agree with the idea that funding exploration of outer space should be expended on other matters needing attention.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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