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One of your friends wants to apply for a job at a summer school as a sports trainer. Write a letter to the camp manager to recommend your friend. In you letter: Say how well you know your friend Describe the qualifications and experience that your friend has Explain why your friend would be suitable for this job.

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Dear sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to recommend to you my friend for a job at
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 port trainer in our summer
school
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 camp. I know her very well because we completed our academy and college education together.
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, She is a very intelligent, diligent, considerate, and dedicated person. She always won prizes and
sports
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 competitions in
school
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. We understand each other easily.
our
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 friendship is really indestructible. My friend has completed her master’s in
sports
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 sciences from the University of Iran. After that, she joined a
school
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 where she
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 been doing a job as a
sports
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 trainer for 3 years.
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, she wants to leave that organization
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 the long salary package and
decrease
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 chances of promotion. She is highly suitable for
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 designation because she has leadership qualities and manages students strictly.
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, Her fitness level is extraordinary and she
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 knows specific
sports
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 exercises and how to deal with
sports
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-related injuries which are crucial for summer
school
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 camping. If you give
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 available position to my friend, you will never be disappointed. I look forward to receiving your response. yours faithfully, Mustafa

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic. Avoid blending personal relationship details with professional qualifications too heavily, as it reduces the clarity of the recommendation.
coherence cohesion
Use more varied and complex structures to express your ideas, and ensure there are clear connections between your points.
task achievement
Provide specific examples and details about your friend's qualifications and experience to strengthen your recommendation.
task achievement
Maintain a formal, consistent tone throughout the letter, as it is a professional recommendation, and avoid informal language.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Enthusiastic, dedicated coach
  • Sportsmanship and teamwork
  • Inspirational leader
  • Physical education credentials
  • Interpersonal and communication skills
  • Youth engagement
  • Mentorship abilities
  • Fitness instruction
  • Adaptability in diverse environments
  • Proven track record
  • Positive role model
  • Stamina and energy
  • Professionalism in sports training
  • Passionate about physical activity
  • Behavior management
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