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some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. they say that the only way to increase recycling is for government to make it legal requirment. to what extend do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

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Home waste is becoming a major problem in
people
's lives
,
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 since it is not recycled properly. Currently, waste in society has become a topic of discussion among
people
. I agree that the authority should declare a law on garbage to make
people
 recycle more.
To begin
 with, the
number of
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population is increasing, so every year, millions of tons of plastic are produced on our planet, and it causing serious damage to the environment.
For example
, disposable items,
such
 as bottles, wrappers, etc are discarded after being used once,
then
 they end up on the street and eventually they travel to oceans through sewage pipes, where it jeopardizes the lives of countless animals. It is
also
 spreading diseases among
people
, so the
government
 should not only ban plastic bags but
also
 put charges on
people
 who try to use them.
In addition
, for improving the awareness of recycling objects, the
government
 should plan campaigns to spread the knowledge of
advantages
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 of using renewable things and
also
 give them information about
differences
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 between renewable and nonrenewable objects, so they can try to use
this
 knowledge properly.
For instance
, if individuals separate distinct garbages from each other and give them to officials who are appointed by the
government
, not only less waste will produce, but eventually, any non-recyclable garbage will recycle. In conclusion, I strongly contend that due to increasing the number of rubbish in the world, the
government
 should take
responsible
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 to enact stringent
law
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 and give knowledge to
people
 about recycling.
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