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LIFE NOW IS BETTER THAN IT WAS 100 YEARS AGO. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE WITH THIS STATEMENT? GIVE REASONS FOR YOUR ANSWERS AND INCLUDE ANY RELEVANT EXAMPLES FROM YOUR OWN KNOWLEDGE OR EXPERIENCE.

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Nowadays, coping with
life
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 is much easier and the opportunities we have are enormous
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 to
life
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 100 years prior. I partly agree with
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 statement.
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modern day
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life
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 is less difficult to live in
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 because our ancestors had already solved many technical problems that occur in our everyday activities and living.
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, they have created many inventions that could tackle our issues in tasks and labour,
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 a great deal of material for entertainment.
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, there are many new forms of entertainment, like televisions, the internet,
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and streaming
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 music online to replace the old practice of going to
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 or listening to music in concerts.
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, medical development
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 helps us deal with many of which
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 incurable diseases back
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.
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, Louis Pasteur developed
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vaccines for rabies, which was a very dangerous disease.
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, living in
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 time
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 has multiple drawbacks. Due to the ease of
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 living conditions, some
people
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 lack many factors that would consist of an ideal
life
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. Take hard work for
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example, many
people
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 would have been heavily reliant on machines and
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another kind
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 of technology to solve their jobs.
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,
people
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 can face serious trouble with their laziness. Or say creativity,
people
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 won't seek something new,
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 only aiming for small insignificant purposes in
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. In conclusion,
life
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 now was somewhat better than 100 years ago, but
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 comes with a disadvantage. While now we can live better and safer with more medical,
technological
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advance
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, we
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 see a decline in the quality of many
individuals
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life
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standard
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standards
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.
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