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In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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Today's, overweight and fatty is happening in a number of countries and the health of
people
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 is at risk due to several causes during the years and these issues may have a kind of solution, so I try to say some of the courses and solutions in
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 essay. Industrialization and modernity, are a reason for happening speedy life, and
people
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 consistently think they are behind in life and do not have enough time for something
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 as
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 and exercise.
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 they usually eat fast
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 and convenience
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 that usually are oily and not made with fresh material.
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, after a while, they face with overweight and
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 fatty
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, they do not seem in good shape and so, it causes many diseases like hyperlipidemia and diabetes and coronary and heart accident. Always, forever issue is the solution. The government should make new rolls for tax on
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that is
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 harmful to the health public and especially about using high-quality material for making the foods with using the less harmful material like oil and salt. Another way, they should decline the price of healthy
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 and vegetables to easy access for everyone who has a low income.
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 all them, training
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 about what they eat and giving information them about the care for themselves. In conclusion, industrialization causes
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 to not have enough time for cooking and usually they eat fast
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 and ready
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, so the government should interfere and they decline the price of vegetables and healthy
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 and so training
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • physical activity
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • exercise
  • unhealthy diet
  • fast food
  • urbanization
  • modernization
  • stress
  • awareness
  • education
  • government intervention
  • policies
  • promotion
  • sports
  • fitness programs
  • health education
  • taxation
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • parks
  • recreational spaces
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