Computer have changed the way people study. What are the advantages and disadvantages of using computers as study aids?

There is no doubt that these days, technology and modernity
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changed our globe. The occurrence of
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and sophisticated devices help the process of learning. In
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I am going to analyse both pros and cons of the high demand
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these instruments. On the one hand, in terms of the benefits of advanced
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usage in education. The simplicity and availability of these devices
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an easy way to learn and absorb any information. In
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, modern devices provide a significant opportunity to improve people's knowledge even from their homes or workplace. As a shining example, I got my pharmacy diploma online while I was working in the same year. On the other flip of the coin,
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,
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been shown across the globe.
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, individuals might become addicted to computers, they could use computers to play or waste their time playing video games and watching meaningless movies.
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exposure to other people is not a good idea for children. They might contact
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forbidden sites that
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sexual or dangerous materials and no accurate information.
For instance
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conducted by King Saud University states that technology and several social media platforms
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adolescents to commit crimes which
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to a considerable increase in
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rate
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internet
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is
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harmful and related to awful consequences,
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others claim computers have a plethora of
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positive
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Therefore
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could be used with a conscious to expand our knowledge and reach a high level of education.
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