The growing number if overweight people is putting a burden on the healthcare system in an efforts to deal with the issues involved. Some people think that the best way to solve this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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number

of

the

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overeighted

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overweight

overweighted

people

is drastically increasing, the experts start to discuss

about

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introducing more physical educational

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activities

activites

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activities

in the school curriculum to reduce the

number

of

obesities

.

However

, some experts claim that physical education

lessons

are not relevant to decreasing the

number

of overweighted

people

.

This

essay will argue both sides of them.

First

of all, adopting more physical

educational

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lessons

is less pricey than reducing the

number

of adults

obesities

through the healthcare budget. The cost of reducing the

adults

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adult's

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obesities

is absolutely costly.

For example

, overweight

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people

poeple

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people

have to go to see a doctor and take several medical

exminations

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examinations

examination

to

obeserve

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observe

what kind of diseases

that

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overweight patients have. If the diseases are dreadful to

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overweight

people

,

then

the

people

have to charge for a massive amount of money

through

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the

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healthcaresystem

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healthcare system

. So, if more physical educational systems are introduced from

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childhood, the only costs to pay are the salaries

for

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the physical educators and facilities.

On the other hand

, if more physical

activities

are forced to be adopted, some

children

are likely to be injured

physicall

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physically

and mentally. Some

children

might love to play around outside, but some

children

dislike to undergo outside plays and there might be even

children

who

are not shine

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at physical

activities

.

This

cause the

children

to feel as overwhelmed as they hate the

activities

which can give mental disorders to

children

. And

this

results in placing a more burden on the healthcare system to cure

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mental health. In summary, including physical

lessons

in the school curriculum is less costly than paying for

adults

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adults'

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obesities

through

budget

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the budget

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system.

However

, more

activities

can cause more expense to cure the mental disorder that results from the physical

lessons

.