Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course. Write a letter to the college enrollment officer. In your letter • explain why you are writing • describe your circumstances • ask if a special exception can be made for you so you can enroll in the course
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Dear Sir,
I am writing to express why I want to join the CSC200
course
. I am a university sophomore student who major
in English. Wrong verb form
is majoring
Although
my major is not related to electronic technology, I still want to take computer classes, and also
I have read some books on computers, so I think that I can quickly enter a learning state and mode. At the same time, I know it is designed for students with a certain base in the course
, but I believe in my abilities, so I think I deserve this
opportunity.
What is more, the main reason of
learning data science knowledge is that I really like the teacher for Change preposition
for
this
course
. Last
semester, when selecting courses, I did not get the chance because many people liked her classes and they had the priority to choose her course
. Secondly
, This
semester, I missed a point in credits to complete the semester tasks. I want to choose a course
that is
not related to English but I am interested in.
Lastly
, I hope you can prepare the elementary course
test for me next week to see whether I am qualified to take this
further
lesson. I look forward to hearing from you, and if you have any further
information, please do not hesitate to contact me.
Yours faithfully,
Xiyue TangSubmitted by cathyielts22 on
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task achievement
You've expressed your desire to enroll in the course and provided a thorough explanation of your circumstances, which is great. To enhance your letter, consider including more specific examples of your self-study in computers to strengthen your case.
coherence cohesion
Your letter has a clear structure, but to improve coherence, you could make better transitions between paragraphs, linking them more smoothly to create a more cohesive flow.
task achievement
Excellent job in maintaining a polite and formal tone throughout the letter, which is appropriate for writing to a college enrollment officer.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are well done, setting a respectful tone for your correspondence.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite