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Despite health warnings, a large number of people continue to smoke all over the world. Why should we be concerned about this? What solutions would you suggest? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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There is no doubt that these days number of
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a smoker
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smoker
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 is increasing in the world. The question is, why we should worry about
this
 habit? In
this
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 I am going to write my own opinion and my own conclusion. In terms of
disadvantage
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,
that
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the
governments
 don’t take a serious step
to
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phasing
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 out from
productions
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 of Tobacco. The main reason given to support
this
 claim is that the
governments
 have not published information about the effect of smoking. To illustrate there are still places
allow
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 smoking
with
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a
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 cheapest prices while they allow
to
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bringing children
in
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this
 area which caused air pollution which in turn affects the health of children. In
the
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other word, there
is
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 no serious anti-smoking fines from the
governments
.
Moreover
, some
the
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governments
 have taken a good side.
Firstly
, they put taxes
in
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production
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 of Tobacco which caused
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use
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 product of Tobacco.
In
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 the other hand,
this
 led to an
increasing
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 in the country’s income which is perfect that can the
governments
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these money
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to
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 health care.
Secondly
, some
governments
 have treated smoking cessation for
a
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free and
this
 prompted many people to treat the effects of smoking
in addition
 to that, there is a study from
health
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a health
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organization
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organizations
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 stating that the number of
smoker
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smokers
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 in Saudi Arabia declining due to government instruction to combat smoking. In conclusion,
governments
 must ensure take a serious
step
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steps
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 to reduce
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the product
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product
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products
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 of smoking and dissemination
of
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information about the harmful effects of smoking
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