Many young children have unsupervised access to the internet and are using the internet to socialize with others. This can lead to a number of dangerous situations which can be threatening for children.

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has led to some grievous situations which can be

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essay will buttress some of these problems and profess some meaningful

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will lead to low concentration in academic activities thereby resulting in low grades.

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who were involved in a study which was carried out in a model school here in Nigeria

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children

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without

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perform better academically because their attention was not divided during studies.

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is an ugly condition perpetrated by

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opportunity to the

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medium to advertise unverified jobs and when they are able to get a victim, they will ask for money before the work will be offered to them, as soon as the target pays, the amount agreed upon, that contact will be blocked permanently while they continue with their business. Parents should install

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activities on

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on all the

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used by kids.

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will enable them to have control over all that the

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are doing.

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youngsters

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have unsupported permission to

use

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the

internet

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, thereby utilizing

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to associate with others.

this

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has led to some grievous situations which can be

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apply

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alarming to

children

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essay will buttress some of these problems and profess some meaningful

conclusion

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conclusions

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will be drawn. One of the

issue

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issues

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with

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this

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is uncontrolled

use

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and early exposure to

devices

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such

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phones

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, computers,

laptops

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and laptops

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will lead to low concentration in academic activities thereby resulting in low grades.

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youngsters

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who were involved in a study which was carried out in a model school here in Nigeria were split into two groups, those using

internet

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devices

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and the ones who do not

have

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apply

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children

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without

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perform better academically because their attention was not divided during studies.

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cyber crime

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is an ugly condition perpetrated by

children

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with

free

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opportunity to the

internet

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. They

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avenue

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to the

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have

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detrimental

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effect

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on the lives of

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, parental control and supervision will help to curb

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menace.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

458 words

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Many young children have unsupervised access to the internet and are using the internet to socialize with others. This can lead to a number of dangerous situations which can be threatening for children.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some people believe that the experiences children have before they go to school will have the greatest effect on their future lives. Others argue that experiences gained when they are teenagers have a bigger influence. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.

You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter Describe the item Explain where and when you left it Say what action you would like the company to take Write at least 150 words.