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You recently made a journey by train. When you got on the train, you realised you had left a bag on the platform. Write a letter to the station manager. In your letter: • give details of where and when you left the bag • describe the bag and its contents • suggest how you could get the bag back

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Dear Sir or Madam, Recently, I was on a train trip to Texas from New York. At the Texas station, being in a hurry, I accidentally left my
bag
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 on the right-side platform. I checked my ticket, and the time that I got on the train was 15:20, 11.02.2020. The
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 of the
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 was navy blue, and inside the
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 were a few things like my MacBook, my headphones, a book titled “The Secret,” and
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 in the back pocket, there was my wallet with $1200 cash, 2 bank cards, and my ID card. If somehow someone finds the
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 or any of the station employees come across it, you can reach me at my phone number: 078146736283. We can meet at the station, or if convenient, you can send it over through postal services. My postal code is 2025, Gheorghe Asachi
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 and my contact number remains the same. Thank you very much for your attention to
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 matter. Your assistance in locating my
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 would be greatly appreciated. Sincerely,
Jhon
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Coherence and Cohesion
Try to ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea clearly, which would improve the overall coherence.
Task Achievement
Consider adding a brief introduction to your letter outlining the purpose more clearly.
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Your use of a polite closing statement enhances the tone of your letter, showing respect and gratitude.
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The details provided about the bag and its contents are specific and clear, which helps in identifying the bag.
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