Doctors, nurses and teacher make a great contribution to society and should be payed more than entertainment and sport celebrities. Do you agree or disagree?

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Well, I love to read
books
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and play sports. I read both fiction and non-fiction
books
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. I play some sports
such
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as soccer, badminton, and swimming. I read
books
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daily. I love reading because I gain a
lot
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of knowledge and information. Reading
book
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books
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also
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helps me to keep
emotional
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balance in difficult situations. I bring a book written by a meditation master named Thich Nhat Hanh all
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time
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. I read
books
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for at least 30 minutes daily, and play football once a week. My colleagues often reserve a football playground near my workplace. My colleagues and I go there and play together every Saturday evening. I have been reading
books
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for over 15 years. Actually, I was in high school. During my high school period, I often read fiction
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such
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as
sword fighter
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and
detective
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books
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. Most of them I borrowed from my friends. I used to play computer games, especially when I was in university. You know. I didn't live with my parent during
this
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period, and I could not be against the appeal of computer games which make me feel like joining a new world. In my experience, hobbies play an important role in my life. It helps me to relax, gain social relationships, improve
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my knowledge
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, learn new skills and build my passion
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. I often work from 7a.m to 4p.m., sometimes I must work night shifts. I just live alone So I don't need to take care of others.
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, I have a
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of free
time
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. Well, It is very important. I have some personal
targetssuel
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targets such
as learning English, travelling to some domestic beautiful places, and dating some girls. So I spend my free
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to get
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plans to reach them. Well, I really have a
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of free
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, but If I had more, I would spend
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learning medical knowledge, learning how to write a book review, and learning painting. Of course. My company paid me an average of $5 an hour. Nowadays there are a
lot
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of services that you spend money on to reduce consumption
time
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. To be honest, I think every
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waste their
time
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on different account from a little to a huge amount.
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flow
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naturally, and people should live at the present
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. I have not visited any aqua-zoo. If I visited there, I would swim with dolphins.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • critical role
  • healthcare professionals
  • societal well-being
  • disparity in income
  • skewed values
  • essential services
  • remuneration
  • mitigate
  • global shortages
  • inherent value
  • nurturing
  • compensation
  • societal contributions
  • profound impact
  • equitable distribution
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