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The line graph illustrates every year's income on average in four nations from 1995 to 2019. Overall, wage changes in Japan could hardly be seen, whilst Greece presented a sharp increase and decrease over the period.
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 growth tendency between New Zealand and Poland. Focusing on the transition of wage in japan, which shows stable figure at approximately 37,000 for the 24 years.
By contrast
, Greece presented a steep increase in annual income from 1995 to 2003 with its number increasing from about 17,000 to more than 35,000. After
this
 considerable change, once the number remains roughly unchanged between 2003 and 2004, it shows a sharp decrease in 2019. Moving on the percentage in Poland and New Zealand, the latter presented constant growth from about 17,000 to 25,000 in the 10-year to 2015, after which the figures surged to less than 35,000.
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, New Zealand shows
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 considerable increase of about 15,000 between 1995 and 2007. Afterwards, the change was stabilized and the country recorded the highest rate of the other 3 countries.7
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