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Some people believe that smart phones are destroying social interaction today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the rapid development of technology, it is commonly believed that
smartphones
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, which have now become ubiquitous, are putting an end to social bonds.
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 statement may partially be true, I do not totally concur with it and believe that
smartphones
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 are, in some aspects, beneficial to human
interactions
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. On the one hand, the use of
smartphones
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 to communicate with people who are far away has enabled individuals from around the world to gather virtually without having to meet up directly. Not only has
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 convenience improved our quality of living, but it has
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 increased social
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 within groups of acquaintances and people from different societies. A shred of vivid evidence comes from students who study abroad. These students, despite being deprived of the opportunity to stay with their families, can now interact with them online on the daily basis.
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 it is true that online
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 have gone up, face-to-face conversations, which are considered to be more important, have significantly declined in quantity.
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 is owing to the fact that once one gets addicted to delusional online bonds, they will no longer conduct real-life
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 as of its inconvenience, especially teenagers and young people.
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, many teenagers nowadays refuse to leave their room for a direct conversation as they can do the same thing online. If teenagers had not been using
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, many of them would have participated more in face-to-face conversations. In conclusion,
smartphones
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 provide a few benefits in enhancing social
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.
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, given that detrimental implications take precedence over positive ramifications, I agree that these devices are destroying social
interactions
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