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Sompe people say now is the best time in history to be living. what is your opinion about this? what other time in history would be interesting to live in?

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It is crystal clear that our lives have changed beyond recognition. Every year new technologies are invented. Some people think now is the best time during human
lives
Change the noun form
life

Your sentence appears to use the incorrect form of lives. Consider changing it to singular.

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 period to live in while
on the other hand
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 others argue that, there are other periods that might be interesting to live in. I wholeheartedly opine that these days are the best days. In
this
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essay
Add a comma
,essay

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 I will discuss, both views. To embark, to advance a convincing theory I could deal with the advent of new technologies. It is obvious that
,
Remove the comma
apply

It appears that you have an unnecessary comma after the subordinating conjunction that. Consider removing the comma.

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 they have made our lives much easier and faster.
For example
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,
telephone
Add an article
the telephone

The noun phrase telephone seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 has made communication faster.
Moreover
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, you can get in touch with other people in foreign countries.
In addition
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 to what I have just said, you can
also
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 have it as your wallet, tv, camera and etcetera.
Furthermore
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, transportation is quicker. The fastest way to travel is by air. It was written in a magazine that, the longest air travel in the world is about 23 hours from Australia to America, while in the past it took about 6 months to go
Maka
Change preposition
to Maka

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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 from Iran which
they
Correct pronoun usage
apply

It seems that there is a pronoun problem here.

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are very close to each other. In the forthcoming; paragraph I could deal whit other centuries. I’m not even interested in living on the previous decade. On the grounds that there wasn’t any tech in the past. Another feature which I could mention is about
feature
Add an article
the feature
a feature

The noun phrase feature seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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. I’m sure most people would probably agree that there will be great changes related to
this
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.
First
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 and foremost, there will be many robots and I really can’t stand them. Especially, the ones that are like
Add an article
a human

The noun phrase human seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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human
Fix the agreement mistake
humans

It seems that human may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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. Because they are more powerful than individuals, yet they only don’t have sense. To conclude, in the past everything was ruff and in the
future
Add a comma
,future

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase in the future. Consider adding a comma.

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 everything will change a lot and I prefer to live
this
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