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Some people believe that rich countries should provide poorer countries with other types of help rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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globalization, some people claim that
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 of funding developing
countries
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, rich
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 should
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 provide other resources in order to offer help. As far as I am concerned, I agree with
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 view to a large extent as introducing talents can be as important as giving financial aid.
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 with, receiving financial aid may help promote sustainable development. As poorer nations may not have enough capital to construct infrastructures, receiving funds from richer
countries
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 may encourage them to improve their social services.
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, citizens may have the opportunity to relax and build up a stranger body strength once hospitals and entertainment facilities are settled in the community.
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,
productivities
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productivity
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 may be enhanced if workers have
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healthier physical and mental health, which may
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 sustain
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social production.
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, poorer nations may
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 grab the benefit from importing specialists. As modern knowledge seems to be a major factor
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 improving a country’s
statue
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, attracting certain talents may boost
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creativity and innovation.
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, professors may set up particular strategies
toward
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 different issues and help the nations to reach
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their
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target
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.
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,
countries
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 may expose themselves to various
aspect
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 of solutions once they can gain help from talents.
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 may increase their soft power and maintain healthy development. In conclusion, providing financial aid may help
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 productivity once citizens can better enjoy their life, it may be more beneficial for poorer
countries
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 to improve their soft power and
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 sharpen their competitive edge by receiving different specialists.
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