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Although there is a lot of software available today that can translate from one language to another, it is still necessary for people to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#software #language #people
Learning a foreign
language
 in my opinion
it
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is very necessary
nowdays
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.It is
apart
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 of
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the knowledges
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knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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 and
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cultural
culturals
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culture
 of everyone.Both of them are good ways to understand
with
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people but for
myself
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 I would choose better
learning
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 a foreign
language
 than using translating transmit
the
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software.I feel
in
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this
 way for two
reason
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 which I will explain in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
,by learning a foreign
language
 you will have more
confident
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 in yourself when you speak with other that are from the same nation and don'
t
 know your native
language
.
For example
,
last
 summer I had a tour
in
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 Paris.
In my
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 desire was to visit all the historical places because I am in passion
with
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 history but I don'
t
 understand well when they explained and I became too much angry with myself.After I back
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home
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 I started a course about
French
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the French
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language
.
On the other hand
,of
course
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 if you are too busy with other things you don'
t
 have free time to learn every
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 for each place you visit.One time when I went Japony to hold a conference
the
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 construction of
building
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I don'
t
 know their
language
 but I used google translate from Japan to Albanian and in
this
 way I haven'
t
difficulty
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 with understanding. In conclusion,I strongly believed that learning a foreign
language
it
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is better for all of us because you will become more confident
to
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 yourself and others.
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