The continued rise in the world's population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time what are the causes of this continue rise? what would be the measures to address the greatest problem faced by humanity?

The increasing
population
rate is one of the greatest problems at the present time by some, while others have
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on that matter. My point of view is that there are more important issues that need attention,
such
as climate change.
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the causes of
this
situation might even be advantages for human progress, advanced medicine
for example
or
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like poor education. Starting with the fact that
world
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population
has almost reached 8 billion
people
, compared to a hundred years earlier when it was around 2 billion, respectively.
People
then
did not have the access to enough food and water supplies. They
also
suffered from frequent deads, due to poor medicine, hygiene and diets.
However
, we
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say that the world experienced economic progress, which gave the opportunity for better living conditions, including healthcare.
This
also
declined deads rates and led to
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population
. Even though some agree that the
population
boom leads to natural
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,
thus
omitting more global
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, limitation of resources and overcrowding spaces
such
as China or Japan, I believe that it is needed for our growth and a simple solution could be some balance on
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of emission and better birth control education. When we think about it, we can notice all of the cons of reproduction starting to fall. We will make and consume less, would not be able to maintain the infrastructure, the military strength will decline and there would be
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change. High taxes will be put due to more retired
people
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that political
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Bulgaria. To conclude, even though there are some ecological disadvantages from more
people
born on
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basis,
on the other
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it keeps the economy going that will be able to handle the problem with ecology,
such
as advanced machines.
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  • Population explosion
  • Birth rate
  • Mortality rate
  • Life expectancy
  • Family planning
  • Contraceptive methods
  • Sex education
  • Population control
  • Sustainability
  • Global development
  • Demographic transition
  • Reproductive health
  • Infant mortality
  • Fertility rate
  • Societal norms
  • Educational attainment
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