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Living in a country where you have to spake a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#country #spake #language
People
 have to speak to connect with the beautiful world. Some
people
lives
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 in other country and have to
communicates
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in
overseas
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an overseas
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language
 can create important social miscommunications and personal issues. I think that
although
 speaking in
foreign
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a foreign
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 tongue can cause some
problems
, it is
also
 effective for
people
 in
another ways
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. 
To begin
 with,
peoples
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people
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whom
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who
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 lived in another land and talk
with
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in
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non-native
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a non-native
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language
 find social
problems
such
 as
cope
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coping
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 with their culture and
communicate
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communicating
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to
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with
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people
.
In addition
, they
also
 find practical
problems
 like hard
to
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earning
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.
Peoples
 find
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it difficulty
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difficulty
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 to connect with their local
people
 by talking
with
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in
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 different
language
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languages
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 resulting in coping
up
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apply
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with their culture and environment
is become
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 harder for them.
This
 may help to obstruct
with
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their social activities.
Moreover
,
people
also
 find
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it difficulty
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difficulty
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 to maintain their subsistence. Because speaking in
foreign
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language
also
create
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creates
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problems
 to do work
as a result
 earning money is becoming
tenecious
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tenacious
 for them possible leading to take poverty in their
life
 which make their lives harder.
For example
, when
bengli
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Bengali
people
 go
in
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to
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a
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an
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Americans
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 restaurant, they find
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difficult
difficulty
diffulty
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it diffulty
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 to order
foods
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 cause the weiter is talking in
english
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. Those
peoples
also
 face
same
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 situations when they work here and have to serve their local community.
Therefore
, growing
in
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a nations
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a nation
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 where have to talk in
overseas
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an overseas
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 tongue can
makes
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make
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people
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people's
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 lifestyle dangerous.
On the other hand
, even though it is harder to speak, it
also
 has some positivity including grasping
skill
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skills
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.
Peoples
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who
whom
whome
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who
 lived in
different
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the different
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 county have a chance to know lots of unique proficiency provided them
lots
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with lots
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 of new
experience
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experiences
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 which will help them in
further
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a further
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stage
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stages
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 of
life
.
For instance
, if a person bought up in
bought up in
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USA
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the USA
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 and
then
 back to Bangladesh,
bangladeshi
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 companies
ready
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are ready
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 to provide high salaries for them. Indeed, living in another country can
makes
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make
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people
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people's
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life
 beautiful.  In conclusion, growing up in a non-native speaking land
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makes
makess
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makes
people
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people's
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 social
life
 and practical
life
 harder. But, I
also
 think that it has
also
 some advantages.
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