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The internet is the best way to know about different things around the world .To what extend do you agree or disagree

#internet #world
In the digital era, it has become a trend to use
internet
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 to obtain information about the
world
 because it is the
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easiest
easist
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easiest
 method for getting knowledge . In my perspective , it is entirely true because in terms of speed as well as
interact
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 with
people
internet
 is better than all other options To commence with,
internet
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 is the fastest mode comparative television and newspaper to get any desired information. To explain,
people
 prefer to surf
internet
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 for getting international and national news around the
world
 because
internet
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 is providing quick information
regaring
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regarding
 all over the
world
 whereas,
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and television take
lot
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 of time to spread
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awareness
awarness
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awareness
in
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around
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 the
world
 .To epitome , recently a cold war started between
russia
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 and
ukraine
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 at that time
internet
 was spread
news
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the news
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 within a few seconds about
war
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the war
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 over the
world
.
Thus
, with the help of
fastest
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the fastest
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 connectivity
of
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internet
ukraine
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Ukraine
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received
recevied
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received
 financial help from seven nations within a few minutes
Moreover
 , it has become
trend
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 to meet others through the
internet
 . To explain it, youngsters are using various applications to interact with near and dear ones whereas,
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and television do not provide
such
privilege
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a privilege
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 to communicate with friends because it is
cost effective
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 approach to interact with others .
for example
,in India approximately 90%
people
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of people
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using
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whatsapp
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WhatsApp
Whatsapp
 for interacting with individuals .by
this
 activity they can maintain their
relationship
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relationships
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 with others for
long
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a long
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 time . In conclusion,
since
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apply
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not only is the
internet
 the fastest but provides
an
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opportunities to communicate with
people
 as well. I am convinced that it is the best approach to get knowledge about all over the
world
 within
few
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a few
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 seconds .
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