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Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome?

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India is the 2nd most populous country in the world with more than 1 billion
people
. While India aims to turn into a $ 5 Trillion economy in the
next
 ten years, we are faced with several
challenges
 that are bound to create hurdles
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this
 journey. I would like to go through some of these
challenges
 and provide some suggestions to resolve them, through
this
 essay. The very
first
 challenge for our country is our humongous population. With the
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 population, comes another challenge to feed the
people
, as the rate of production and supply of food is not enough to meet our demands.
Additionally
, unregulated manufacturing industries and the increasing traffic in major cities are causing increased pollution.
Moreover
, as many
people
 are still living below the poverty line, most
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poor
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people
 are still uneducated and unemployed.
This
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 the divide between the rich and the poor. We need to quickly
address
 these
challenges
 in order to stay on track towards becoming a developed nation. I believe
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 the solutions to
address
 these
challenges
 are not that tough, we just need to create and mandate the
right
 policies to
address
 them beforehand.
Firstly
, we need to get our
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 population in control by promoting
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Family:1 Child Policy. Newer Agricultural techniques could be used to increase our food production
such
 as adopting
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Artificial
 Intelligence into farming.
Additionally
, stricter policies towards controlling pollution
such
 as subsidizing electric vehicles and penalizing companies which do not follow
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 waste management techniques can definitely help us.
Furthermore
, I strongly recommend that every Indian citizen should have a basic
right
 to education since it is easier for educated
people
 to find employment.
Moreover
, the government should tax the high
networth
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net worth
 individuals much higher than today in order to reduce the great divide between the rich and the poor. To summarize, our nation needs
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 focus to
address
 the
challenges
 that we would be facing in the future in order for us to become a world
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Ecosystem
  • Renewable resources
  • Urbanization
  • Demographics
  • Healthcare system
  • Pension crisis
  • Curriculum development
  • Digital literacy
  • E-learning platforms
  • Lifelong learning
  • Public policy
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Green technology
  • Population density
  • Generational equity
  • Economic disparity
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