Shopping is becoming more and more popular as a leisure activity. However, some people feel that this has both positive and negative effects. Why is shopping so popular? What effects does its increase in popularity have on individuals and on society?

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In today ‘s world, shopping is admired by a lot of people and considered
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a leisure activity. Many today believe that its own merits and demerits. Social
media
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and technology play a key role in increasing the
popularity
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of shopping. It encourages the individual spending capacity and wastage of resources which is against
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society well- being. Digital
media
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is majorly contributing in
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the attention towards shopping. People are technically literate and highly influenced
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social
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. Social
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such
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as Instagram,
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and face-book
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gives
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motivation to
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the individual
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to shop whereas online shopping sites
such
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amazon
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, Flipkart, Myntra, Zepto etc gives the ease of access to
goods
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and services for
shop
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the shop
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.
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Ease of payment, home delivery,
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from any part of the world, exchange offers, discounts coupons, free gifts and so on makes
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shopping easier and quicker. Due to
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and 365 days availability, shopping become a part of
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of daily lives and even act as a therapy for
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and leisure activity. Excess
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anything is not a healthy sign
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any kind. Due to
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popularity
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of shopping, it has
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adverse impact on individuals,
environment
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the environment
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and society.
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behind
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that people are spending carelessly, spending capacity for luxury
goods
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has
been
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increased. Things were not fully consumed as per their prescribed shelf life and dumped into
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which leads to wastage of
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resources
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,
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degradation and scarcity of resources for
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generation
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. Individuals should always keep that in mind while shopping,
firstly
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identify
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the need whether it’s
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luxurious
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goods
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or a necessary
good
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, where all the products are going at the end or whether it is value for money or not. To conclude, ease of access
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goods
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and social
media
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both equally play a crucial role in booming the
popularity
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for
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shopping. Increased
popularity
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for shopping makes the individual carefree,
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but lack
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of monetary
values
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value
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and extensive usage of resources results in scarcity which is not in favour of society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • leisure activity
  • consumer culture
  • emotional satisfaction
  • consumerism
  • advertising influence
  • online shopping platforms
  • sense of pleasure
  • social interaction
  • boost the economy
  • compulsive shopping
  • materialism
  • environmental degradation
  • unsustainable demand
  • social inequalities
  • status through possessions
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