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Many people now undertake extreme activities, from hang-gliding to mountain climbing. Why do people risk their lives in this way, and do you think this is a good trend? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The image provides information about the changes that were made to distribution in a Museum between 1998 and 2008. Overall, many changes took place, one of them and maybe by far the most important was the addition of a restaurant in the northwest building and the relocation of certain rooms. In 1998, visitors could find a garden in the structure
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. The permanent
exhibition
 rooms were located east and west of it, separated by a cafe in the north of the building. The Entrance/Exit and ticket sales were south of the property. The temporary
Exhibition
room
 was on the left, while the shop, WC, and the place for Bags and coats were on the right. In 2008 many changes could be seen, the east permanent
exhibition
room
 was enlarged, and
although
 the west
exhibition
room
 disappeared,
this
 space was reused to open a Museum restaurant and relocate the temporary
exhibition
room
. The shop and the Bags and coats were moved from the southeast to the southwest corner.
However
, the cafe reduced its size, which changed the open space to move the WC
next
 to it. The tickets maintain their location. Regardless, the garden had some modifications, including new fountains and a new Café sitting área in the northwest corner.
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