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Some people think that technology is a very good study tool for young people. Others, however, believe that it is harmful for the studying process. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

As
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 becomes ubiquitous, it has been integrated as a study tool
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 the school environment. Some argue that
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 phenomenon negatively impacts the studying process of young generations, while others believe the opposite view where
technology
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 brings significant benefits to the
students
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. I will discuss both views and explain why I agree with the latter.
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 with, there are some potential pitfalls associated with using
technology
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 at school. One of these is reducing the memory ability of children.
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, As all the learning
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 are available on electronic
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,
students
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 do not need to write down the lesson
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 on paper anymore, whereas the writing process will help with the cognitive and memorisation ability.
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,
students
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 will be dependent on
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 to memorise things in their after-school life. Another disadvantage is
students
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 may get distracted from the lessons. They may surf the Internet or play games while studying, which, in the long run, limits their attention span and concentration ability. Despite the mentioned drawbacks, I believe
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 will bring many definite merits to young people with their learning process.
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, they can access all kinds of valuable and informative
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 that were difficult to find and learn in the past, when tech
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 had not been invented yet.
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,
students
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 can learn online through online courses that are, in some cases, superior to face-to-face classes because of their convenience, affordability and short-term length. A final point is that educational
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 can be archived in an organised way, with all notes being stored on the
devices
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 within separate folders, saving time to search for them if needed in future,
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. Clearly,
technology
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 makes it easier to perceive knowledge for the young generation. In conclusion, with the aforementioned,
although
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 electronic
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 may harm children in terms of their studying, the benefits are more significant and valuable.
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, I strongly encourage the integration of
technology
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 in the learning domain.

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