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Some people believe that sports are an essential part of school life for children while you should give reasons for your answers and include. ideas and examples

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Games help in the overall development of a pupil as many people think so do I suggest it to be a compulsory activity in each part of education.Here, I will give my views with reasonable thoughts in the coming paragraphs. 'Playing while learning' has many positives on an individual, they sometimes feel refreshed and energized from their boring study cycle even it helps them to maintain their fitness as not all can be genius at studies some might have some more advanced skills.If it is made compulsory
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 only their skills can be identified or else it might be a waste of talent. In the earlier times, a high degree just mattered as there were no career-developing activities but now activities have proved to be one of them and have drastic scope in future.
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, in a recent survey by the sports ministry positive facts that schools which focused equally on games have better results and career-making opportunities.
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, I do not ignore the fact that learning is not important but sports have their importance in
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 contemporary era . People believe that success can be achieved through sports and more benefits of being fit and healthy and fewer chances of obesity which is a major concern for the world.
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,the ratio of Australians getting obese is less and intend to live a longer and happier life as they are involved in some or other types of games they even win a lot of medals at the Olympics and make their country feel proud. To conclude, there are plenty of benefits of extracurricular activities than just focusing on books as the future is equally going to be distributed in all sectors.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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