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Some people believe that you should strictly control your children’s behaviour, while some others believe children should be free to choose their behaviour. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There has been a controversy about whether
parents
 should
control
 their
children
's behaviour. I think it will adversely affect the relationship between
children
 and
parents
. My answers will be explained in the following paragraphs.
First
, it will dampen kids' confidence. A person's confidence is derived from " I'm a valuable person."
However
, if
parents
 constantly
control
 their
children
's behaviour; they will question their abilities, and distrust what they believe. They will gradually deem themselves as
children
 and yearn for others to take care of them.
As a result
,
children
 will become indecisive and easily influenced by others.
Second
, start disliking themselves. It has been reported that the agitation and anger the kids express at home are protests against their
parents
' long-term interference. It's expected that
parents
 consistently
control
 their kids' thoughts under the name of love;
parents
 think only they can judge their
children
, but their
children
 can not criticize them.
For example
,
parents
 do wrong things sometimes, which might have a negative impact on
children
;
nevertheless
,
parents
 never admit they have done wrong. As a consequence,
such
 a situation will alienate
children
 from their
parents
.
On the other hand
,
parents
' interference is helpful to the growth of
children
 at some points.
For instance
,
parents
 always ask their
children
 to do things for their own benefit. Take me as an example. When I was a kid, every time when I got back, my mom always asked me to wash my hands before eating. In
this
 case, thanks to her "command", which decreased the chances of being ill. In conclusion, I believe it's better for
parents
 not to
control
 their
children
's behaviour.
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