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Today more countries import food from different parts of the world. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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Nowadays, importing
food
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 topical subject of debate. In
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merits or demerits In
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purchasing
food
 from other nations.
To begin
 with, there is an appealing ground why buying
food
 from a different place on the earth
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 pros. Clearly, by importing various types of
food
, people can
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benefit
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health. According to a recent survey, many Asia countries
such
 as Vietnam and
Philippine
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Philippines
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,
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were able to increase citizens' nutrition by purchasing
food
 that they could not produce before due to hot weather.
Moreover
,
food
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 from different countries allows people to buy
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food
 at a low cost.
Therefore
,
this
 offers strong proof that importing goods can
allows
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 people to access
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diverse
food
. Despite the abovementioned views, I reckon that there are some cons
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food
purchasement
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purchase meant
.
First
, it increases the usage of artificial ingredients to increase the expired date of the products for overseas exporting.
For example
, one shows that chemical
flavors
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 were
additionally
 added to the
food
 for exporting compared to domestic selling products.
Second
, the local farmer's income can be affected negatively due to the competitive market condition.
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frequent
food
importing
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 can reduce the quality of the
food
. To sum up,
although
 importing
food
 has many merits, I contend that there are some demerits that we should not be overlooked.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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