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Today more countries import food from different parts of the world. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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Nowadays, importing
food
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 has been
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 topical subject of debate. In
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 regard, the opinion of the public is divided over whether it has
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merits or demerits In
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purchasing
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 from other nations.
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 from a different place on the earth
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 pros. Clearly, by importing various types of
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, people can
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benefit
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health. According to a recent survey, many Asia countries
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Philippine
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,
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were able to increase citizens' nutrition by purchasing
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 that they could not produce before due to hot weather.
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,
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exchanging
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 from different countries allows people to buy
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food
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 at a low cost.
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,
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 offers strong proof that importing goods can
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 people to access
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diverse
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. Despite the abovementioned views, I reckon that there are some cons
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food
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purchasement
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, it increases the usage of artificial ingredients to increase the expired date of the products for overseas exporting.
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 were
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 for exporting compared to domestic selling products.
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, the local farmer's income can be affected negatively due to the competitive market condition.
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frequent
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importing
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 can reduce the quality of the
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. To sum up,
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 importing
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 has many merits, I contend that there are some demerits that we should not be overlooked.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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