Today’s schools should teach their students how to survive financially in the world today. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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to analyse literature, calculate using trigonometry and understand how photosynthesis works, but often
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inexperienced and helpless after graduation when encountering the real world. It is
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argued that academy should teach their enlistment how to survive financially in the world.
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topic is difficult, though. Many educators believe that a school is supposed to teach
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subjects that they will most probably not encounter again post-graduation
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so that teachers can develop open-minded and well-informed individuals. At the same time, it can be argued that schools should impart skills that would be applicable in everyday life. Mathematics,
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but
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teach logic to
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, schools are supposed to prepare the youths for their lives following high school.
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goal is not fully met, as often
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are unable to handle their finances sensibly and
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can often face significant problems. Schools that teach
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how to survive financially could change
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significant shift in the ideology of education is unlikely to take place soon, as the education system has been in place for too long to be easily changed.
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a change of
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scale would be costly, as teachers would have to be trained and a syllabus for
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potential subject would have to be created.
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, in some countries,
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Germany, a community subject is available in which politics and finances are discussed.
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leaves
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from Germany in a better situation to deal with finances in their lives. In conclusion, training school
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in financial matters would be very useful. Adding new content to the syllabus would require a significant amount of money, but the entire community would benefit from
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being better prepared for adult life.
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