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some schools have restricted the use of mobile phones. Is this a positive development or a negative one. Give reasons for your answers and give relevant examples from your experience.

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The two maps illustrate changes made to the town called Stokefold between 1930 to 2010. Overall, it is
tangible
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 transition that
road
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next
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to
ot
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to
river
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the river
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 underwent
expansion
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an expansion
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 in size and extensive development in
field
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fields
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which
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where
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in
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cows dwell over
this
 period.
Initially
, focusing on the Westside of the load which was paralleled from the Bridge to Southwards, spacious pasture was removed
complitely
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completely
 and
thus
 not only a residential
are
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area
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 but
also
 two stores
was
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 added in the 80 years.
On the other hand
, regarding the post office which
located
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at
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in
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 the
center
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 of the town, there
were
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was
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 unchanged in
the
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apply
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size and number.
In addition
, there was considerable growth in the number of homes.
Secondly
, moving on the Eastside of the map, considerable changes were seen: the field for
farm
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 was demolished and thereby a
rudimentaly
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rudimentary
 school was created newly and big home which
possesed
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possessed
 the
baskyard
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backyard
 was transformed into
institution
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an institution
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 for retirement people.
Moreover
,
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surge
suege
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a suege
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 in the number of houses was seen like Westside.
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