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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. why do you think this is happenig? what can government do to help reduce the emount of rubbish?

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These days, the amount of waste which is being created by us is increasing.
This
 essay discusses why
this
 is happening and
also
 explores the measures that governments need to take to bring it under control. the main reason for increasing rubbish is consumerism. Every day,
people
 buy the items which are shown in advertisements, when they do not need them.Take electronic devices as an example. These devices are shown as practical items which are necessary for everyone's home On many television channels.
As a result
,
people
 are persuaded to buy
this
 stuff which is not useful.
Consequently
, most of these devices become useless after a while, so
people
 throw them away.
Nevertheless
, there are some solutions that can be taken to address
this
 issue. One solution is for the government to raise the taxes on products which are not part of the basic needs of life.
This
 can lead to fewer purchases of
this
 kind of item. Another solution is increasing
people
's awareness. Indeed the majority of
people
 may not aware of the impact which rubbish has on the environment.The way forward could be training
people
 from school years.
This
 can cause more effect on society when
people
 enter the community at higher ages.
Subsequently
, these
people
 can transfer their knowledge about the environment and consumerism to the
next
 generation. In conclusion, to reiterate
although
 waste production is growing because of consumerism, there are some solutions which are raising taxes on some products and making
people
 aware of the rubbish effect
has
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on the environment.Should
people
 implement these practices, the problem could get under control.
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