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Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Across the globe, famous people are becoming popular for their appearance and prodigality,
instead
 of their talents, which is an inappropriate instance for a growing generation. I completely agree with it and I will support
this
 view with arguments in the following paragraphs.
First
 of all, it should be mentioned that celebrities provide a huge impact on society, thereby, controlling
community’s
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 opinions and actions.
In addition
, more and more humans get their fame for the good looking face or luxurious
lifestyle
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, without any self achievements. As an example, I can consider well-known supermodel Kendall Jenner, who succeeded thanks to
famous
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their famous
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 family and perfect body shape, and
as a result
, she led the younger generation confident that externality is playing a considerable role in
contemporary
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 world.
Moreover
, media persons promote fake beauty , made by plastic surgeons and imitated prosperity, exposing it
for
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 natural pulchritude. Indeed, they talk about using less makeup foundation to look “natural”, when they already did hundreds of operations to look “perfect ”or show the
auditory only
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 positive side of life.
For instance
, one else eidolon of teenage girls, Bella Hadid whose facial features, made by the hands of a specialist, were considered ideal according to the golden ratio. To conclude from the aforementioned arguments, I firmly believe that prominent individuals should deserve their renown for merits than for profusion and charm.
Otherwise
, it will negatively affect common people.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • glamour
  • wealth
  • achievements
  • portrayed
  • overshadow
  • influenced
  • lifestyles
  • unrealistic
  • expectations
  • values
  • promoting
  • hard work
  • perseverance
  • inspire
  • positive impact
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