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Several languages are in danger of extinction because they spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that government should spend public money on saving thise languages, while other believes that would be a waste of money. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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There are several
languages
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 which are at risk of disappearing from the world due to lack of use by
people
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. Some
people
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 argue that
governments
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 should financially support saving these
languages
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, whereas others think that it is a wastage of
money
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. I believe protecting dialects which are in danger is important, I disagree that
governments
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 should allocate
money
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 for
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 essay will discuss both these viewpoints.
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,
governments
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 should allocate funds to serve the basic needs of society like food, medicine and education, and fuel.
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, if the economy is more stable, authorities can financially support improving peoples' wealth by improving public transportation, sports facilities etc
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 of spending them to save the
languages
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 which are at risk of dying.
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 the quality of life will be improved while society and economy are more stable.
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, the young generation today is not encouraged to study local dialects. Because they see it as a waste of their time since learning those
languages
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 is not very useful for their lives and career.
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, research that has been done using 10 000 university students has shown that 80% of students are not using local
languages
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 for day-to-day verbal communication.
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money
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 will be a waste if
people
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 are not encouraged to learn.
On the other hand
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, language is a prominent feature that can exhibit the value of a well-established culture to the world.
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 saving
languages
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 which are in danger of disappearing is significant as it presents our heritage and proud history to the globe. Because of that financial allocations can be done by
governments
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 up to a certain level to overcome
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 danger. To conclude, even though a cultural value is involved with
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 and they are at risk of dying,
governments
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 should mainly allocate their funds to ensure the quality of life of
people
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.
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,
money
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 will be wasted when
people
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 are not willing to speak those dialects.
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