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The charts below give information about levels of education in Glasgow, a city in Scotland, in 2010.

The charts below give information about levels of education in Glasgow, a city in Scotland, in 2010.
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The mentioned bar
chart
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 enumerates the
education
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 level by
age
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group
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, in numbers,
whereas
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 the pie
chart
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 depicts the varied
age
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group
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, in percentage, in 2010. At a fleeting glance, the bar
chart
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 reveals that
people
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 who had no
qualification
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 in
education
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 dominated among all
age
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 brackets, except the
age
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group
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 of 75+, where
people
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 with
school
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 certificates had the highest ratio. A glance at the bar
chart
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 demonstrates that the
age
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group
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 of 16 to 24, 24 to 35 and 35 to 50 had the highest
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average of a quarter of
people
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had
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who had
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 no
qualification
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 in
education
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,
while
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 the ratio of
school
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 certificates and
university
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 degrees was under one-fifth.
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,
a
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half
number
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 of
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people
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the people
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 had no
qualification
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 in
education
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 in the
age
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 bracket of 50 to 75 and the rest 50 in other sectors (20 and 30 in the proportion of
university
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 degree and
school
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 certificate respectively). The
age
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group
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 of 75+ had a quarter
number
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 of
people
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 with no
qualification
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; in sharp contrast, the
number
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 of
school
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 certificate
people
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 was around three times
than
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that
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 it.
People
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 from the 75+
age
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group
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 had below
the
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one-tenth
number
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 of
university
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 degrees. Analysis of the pie
chart
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 represents that women of all ages were dominated in
school
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 certificates and it had 38% and 35% respectively, simultaneously both the genders had an equal a
third
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 per cent in the
university
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 degree. The percentage of men is higher (32%) than women (29%) who had no
qualification
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 in
education
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, education, age, group, people, qualification, school, university, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage distribution
  • educational levels
  • qualifications
  • higher education
  • school level qualifications
  • no qualifications
  • proportions
  • notable trends
  • outliers
  • age demographics
  • economic conditions
  • social policies
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