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The charts below give information about levels of education in Glasgow, a city in Scotland, in 2010.

The charts below give information about levels of education in Glasgow, a city in Scotland, in 2010.
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The mentioned bar
chart
 enumerates the
education
 level by
age
group
, in numbers,
whereas
 the pie
chart
 depicts the varied
age
group
, in percentage, in 2010. At a fleeting glance, the bar
chart
 reveals that
people
 who had no
qualification
 in
education
 dominated among all
age
 brackets, except the
age
group
 of 75+, where
people
 with
school
 certificates had the highest ratio. A glance at the bar
chart
 demonstrates that the
age
group
 of 16 to 24, 24 to 35 and 35 to 50 had the highest
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average of a quarter of
people
had
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who had
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 no
qualification
 in
education
,
while
 the ratio of
school
 certificates and
university
 degrees was under one-fifth.
Further
,
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half
number
 of
people
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the people
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 had no
qualification
 in
education
 in the
age
 bracket of 50 to 75 and the rest 50 in other sectors (20 and 30 in the proportion of
university
 degree and
school
 certificate respectively). The
age
group
 of 75+ had a quarter
number
 of
people
 with no
qualification
; in sharp contrast, the
number
 of
school
 certificate
people
 was around three times
than
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 it.
People
 from the 75+
age
group
 had below
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one-tenth
number
 of
university
 degrees. Analysis of the pie
chart
 represents that women of all ages were dominated in
school
 certificates and it had 38% and 35% respectively, simultaneously both the genders had an equal a
third
 per cent in the
university
 degree. The percentage of men is higher (32%) than women (29%) who had no
qualification
 in
education
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, education, age, group, people, qualification, school, university, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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