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Museums and art galleries should focus on works that show the history and culture of their own country rather than works of other parts of the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#museums #art #galleries #focus #works #show #history #culture #country #parts #world
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 of our ancient which have been protecting from them on museums. Some people
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believe
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belive
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 they have a priority target only on their
art
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 in their own society in spite focus on foreign country's
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both of them and
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, Some of them are handsel that other
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 gave to us.
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, in
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 we have lots of
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another country
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 which they donated to our king as preciate and
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thankful
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thankful
 or because of a ceremony. In
fact
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 they are gifts and
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demonstrate
demonestarte
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demonstrate
 to us how important we were to another country and showcase
tradition
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the tradition
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 of their people.
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its artist's passion and intellectual, unique mind, and
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 we have
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responsibility
 to conserve all the arts even if they aren't for ours.
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, yesterday
i
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 visited
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a royal
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 place in Niavaran Tehran and in the
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 gallery
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 saw a
beautifull
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beautiful
 work of the reputiutial artist (
picasso
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) which was really astonishing paint and donate to
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 shah in 1962.
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contrary
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focus
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focusing
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foreign land need
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 a lot of
humans
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 power and money.
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