Museums and art galleries should focus on works that show the history and culture of their own country rather than works of other parts of the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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of our ancient which have been protecting from them on museums. Some people
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gave to us.
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which they donated to our king as preciate and
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they are gifts and
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of their people.
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its artist's passion and intellectual, unique mind, and
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saw a
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shah in 1962.
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power and money.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • National Identity
  • Cultural Heritage
  • Cultural Exchange
  • Inclusive
  • Exclusive
  • Preservation
  • Conservation
  • Educational Value
  • Tourism
  • Global Harmony
  • Cultural Exclusivity
  • Economic Growth
  • Heritage
  • Enrich
  • Foster
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