A Museum Near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary / unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary / unpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary / unpaid work. In your letter - explain why you want to do voluntary / unpaid work at the museum - describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful - give details of when you would be available for work

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newspaper about
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guide at your museum. so,I would like to apply for that
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. I am interested in
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to complete my studies because
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am studying art and to complete my studies,
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have to do 3 months of part-time internship at a museum. I find myself
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apply

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a perfect fit for
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because
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have all the required qualities
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as good speaker, time punctual and good learner.
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want to expand my knowledge in my area of studies and working at your museum is the perfect start for me. I am available to work from Monday to Friday after 4 pm to 10 pm as
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doing music classes in
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till 3 pm. I am really looking forward to
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your team .so, I would love to hear from you.
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faithfully
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